Comments on: if her eyes told stories of failure

By: technogenesis

technogenesis — Wed, 26 Mar 2008 00:36:09 +0000

Yeah, I cut my tongue into pieces for some time already…continuously…Soon I will have to use nano-probes to get him down into smaller pieces…

Hope that’ll be possible…

Cheers…Incredible stuff…

By: Che

Che — Mon, 24 Mar 2008 03:52:05 +0000

Reading my comment to you above, I wonder if I was clear about what I meant about maybe there is something beyond or deeper behind the eyes of grief and hopelessness. Only you know what that might be.
I may be all wet, as they say. I wonder if the pain would feel a little less if the goal was to honor and appreciate yourself no matter that you have an eating disorder. I really may be way out of reality, but I wonder if it would hurt less, if you went with the flow for a few days, speaking the truth numerous times each day that you, Vive, are more than your disorder.

By: vive42

vive42 — Sun, 23 Mar 2008 14:51:50 +0000

thanks everyone for the positive feedback

technogenesis, i understood your meaning. typos happen to us all. i do think this story was special- i kinda like the new one, but they can’t all be on this one’s level. in answer to the question i think you were asking in your first question, yes, this is based to some extent on personal experience. but when i was in the situation i was the drowning girl, not the one who had to look on and bite their tongue.

By: technogenesis

technogenesis — Sun, 23 Mar 2008 14:15:35 +0000

errata at my first comment

instead
“I can un-stick myself…”

it should be
“I can’t un-stick myself…”

Peace—
this fresh short story doesn’t hit me so hard as this one…Must say that…

By: kelly

kelly — Sun, 23 Mar 2008 03:07:17 +0000

gave me chills…

By: Che

Che — Sun, 23 Mar 2008 02:39:04 +0000

So powerfully written! So sad! Maybe there is something else behind the eyes of grief.
Your creativity is vast. Please keep writting.

By: Mrs. B

Mrs. B — Sat, 22 Mar 2008 21:42:28 +0000

Baby steps are ALWAYS a good thing.

By: vive42

vive42 — Sat, 22 Mar 2008 16:20:00 +0000

well i was thinking i’d just let it go to waste, but i suppose i’m open to other possibilities.

little baby steps. the first i think would be to attempt something longer and more finished based off of one of the mini stories.

By: Mrs. B

Mrs. B — Sat, 22 Mar 2008 14:20:01 +0000

So….Vanessa….what are you going to DO with this gift. eh?

By: technogenesis

technogenesis — Sat, 22 Mar 2008 13:49:15 +0000

This is your blog…I shouldn’t take care about it, as I don’t care about most of the short stories that are being posted here…but, BUT my mind just sticks with your sentences, one after another…I can un-stick myself…

this is a personal experience like mine is (that you BY ACCIDENT hit in the head), or you smoking weed and trippin’ around?

delete this comment sometime later…please